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风非雨

<p><font color="#f70938" size="3"><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody">以下是初学诗词两月来所作，大家给给意见。谢谢！</span></span></span></span></font></p><p><font color="#f70938" size="3">忆王孙</font><font size="3"><br/><font color="#3809f7">晚凉天气又逢秋，<br/>漫问天涯向小楼，<br/>残照西风禁古丘。<br/>莫淹留，<br/>云水临窗一剪眸。</font></font></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><font color="#dd226d">小重山*思远人</font></span><font color="#3809f7"><span style="COLOR: red;"><br/>(梅花开时作)</span><br/></font><span style="COLOR: blue;"><font color="#3809f7">渡尽流云雁影空,</font></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"></span></span></span><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><font color="#3809f7">星辰犹问路, </font></span></span></span><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><font color="#3809f7">暮山重. <br/>小窗幽淡月明中,</font></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"></span></span></span><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><font color="#3809f7">惊抬眼, 数点颤嫣红. <br/><br/>香冷寄遥峰, 东君须遣护, <br/>待相逢. <br/>去年心意此时同, <br/>黯凝伫, 零落一帘风.</font></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"><font color="#e61a6b">踏莎行*临水抒怀</font><br/>&nbsp;红叶惊秋，烟波淡暮。 <br/>河桥明月分携处。 <br/>粼光漫漫水涵天， <br/>回塘柳影参差舞。 <br/><br/>鸿雁初飞，柔条唤住。 <br/>三年何意经前路。 <br/>小窗应记得来时， <br/>一枝临水嫣红吐。</font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"><font color="#e61a42">诉衷情*寄梅 步欧阳修梅意词韵</font><br/><br/>晚风云淡惹飞霜，<br/>遥夜寄红妆。<br/>相逢自有明月，<br/>最怕是，<br/>远别长。<br/><br/>花已散，<br/>唤韶光，<br/>更神伤。<br/>暗香何处，<br/>笑语窥帘，<br/>梦断人肠。<br/></font></span></span></span></span><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"></font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"><font color="#dd226d">浣溪沙</font><br/>望断斜阳人倚栏，瑶琴不按绣帘卷，<br/>相知还道有无间。 <br/>??　　　　</font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7">陌上垂条思远道，江心明月梦关山，<br/>小楼迷雾惹轻寒。</font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</font><font color="#c43c72">
                                                </font></span></span></span></span><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"><font color="#c43c72">感怀</font><br/>楼角初消一抹红， <br/>蛩声呼破晚来风． <br/>今时已忘来时路， <br/>还认他生作此生 </font></span></span></span></span></p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"></font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </font><font color="#ee1169">无题（新韵)</font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"></span></span></span></span><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7">沧波暮起落飞霞， <br/>芦苇临风送晚鸭。 <br/>回首西江流断处， <br/>望人知是在天涯。</font></span></span></span></span></p><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7"></font></span></span></span></span></p></span></span></span></span><p><span class="postbody"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 18px; LINE-HEIGHT: normal;"><span style="COLOR: blue;"><span class="postbody"><font color="#3809f7">　<br/>??<br/><br/>??　　</font></span></span></span></span></p>

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艾诗人

<p>　　　个人以为词比两绝好．词味浓，得轻灵味．</p><p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 欣赏一把！</p>

风非雨

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>艾诗人</i>在2006-12-11 21:44:07的发言：</b><br/><p>　　　个人以为词比两绝好．词味浓，得轻灵味．</p><p>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; 欣赏一把！</p></div><p>我也是较喜词的，呵呵！谢<strong><em>艾兄赏了！</em></strong></p>

风非雨

欢迎砸帖！（进步才是道理，呵呵）

蓝天孤鹤

词确好！劲赏！

烟雨客

词味好。绝句两结也不错，只是嫌熟语

风非雨

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>蓝天孤鹤</i>在2006-12-11 23:54:26的发言：</b><br/>词确好！劲赏！</div>感谢斑竹鼓励，呵呵

风非雨

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>烟雨客</i>在2006-12-12 18:35:58的发言：</b><br/>词味好。绝句两结也不错，只是嫌熟语</div>感谢烟雨兄批评鼓励！