[原创]七律 为霍山梦鹤先生寿（步窑州散人老师韵）

梦落疏篱

<p><strong><font face="黑体" color="#f70938" size="4">霍山翔鹤翅无寒，清啸声声过玉栏。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="黑体" color="#f70938" size="4">云效逍遥知五味，诗求隽永替三餐。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="黑体" color="#f70938" size="4">风推献寿时时舞，水作流弦故故弹。</font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="黑体" color="#f70938" size="4">彭祖堂前轻一拜，偌个仙桃醉里看。</font></strong></p>

梅庐

颇有轻灵意境，结句大佳

梦落疏篱

<p>谢水兄提点</p><p>习习舞?冬风呢~~~~~</p>

寻天

不知可否换“时时舞”为“习习舞”？这样似乎更堪与“故故弹”两相颉颃。

霍山梦鹤

<p>拜谢了！步韵答谢：</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">秦岭皑皑渭水寒，天涯云隔岂凭栏。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">难为流水瑶音送，欣感漫笺美玉餐。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">长短人生轻计较，真深友谊重谐弹。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ascii-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;">何忘九九联诗句，灯下时常夜半看。</span><font face="Times New Roman">
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