七绝 雾海拾珠

处州竹鸣

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 42pt; mso-char-indent-count: 3.0; mso-char-indent-size: 14.0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; mso-bidi-font-size: 12.0pt;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;</span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 36pt; mso-char-indent-count: 3.0; mso-char-indent-size: 12.0pt;"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span>雾海云涛浮旭日，峰峦隐约似轻舟。<p></p></span></p><p></p><p></p><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;">&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; </span>登高满目三秋景，一路拾珠凌月楼。</span>

梅庐

前两句似观日出景，“凌月楼”有实景？

处州竹鸣

“凌月楼”---形容雾里登山有如登上天庭.

梦落疏篱

<p>起承句形象具体.好</p><p>凌月楼易歧义</p>

梅庐

再读，觉“登高”二字浪费，“凌月楼”似还可斟酌

山色

第二句极为形象

处州竹鸣

<p>谢<strong><font face="Verdana" color="#da2549">梦落疏篱、<font color="#ff0000">梅庐、</font><font color="#61b713">山色诸位诗长评点！</font></font></strong></p><p><strong><font face="Verdana" color="#61b713">待酌。</font></strong></p>

远山邀斜月

不错，拜读了