[原创]调笑令·雪夜（2）
本帖最后由 樱林花主 于 2015-10-6 12:48 编辑<strong><font face="Tahoma" size="4">调笑令·雪夜（2）</font></strong><font color="#000000">
<br/></font><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><font face="Tahoma"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><strong><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><font face="Tahoma"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font color="#0000ff" size="4"><span class="postbody"> 飘雪，飘雪，不尽相思玉蝶。琼花银叶戏空，</span></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></font></span></strong></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></font></span></font></span><font color="#000000">
<br/></font><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><font face="Tahoma"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><strong><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><font face="Tahoma"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font size="4"><span class="postbody"><font color="#0000ff">何时飞起冽风。风冽，风冽，吹散残云问月。</font><br/></span></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></font></span></strong></font></span></font></span></font></span></font></font></span></font></span>
本帖最后由 樱林花主 于 2015-10-6 12:48 编辑
<p>次律严谨。但意象的安排有点散乱，所要表达的意思不是很明显。问好。</p>
本帖最后由 樱林花主 于 2015-10-6 12:48 编辑
<p><strong><font color="#0000ff" size="4">飘雪，飘雪，不尽相思玉蝶</font></strong></p><p><strong><font color="#0000ff" size="4">----这句总领,后面纠缠多了.供参考!</font></strong></p><p><strong><font color="#0000ff" size="4"> 问好.</font></strong></p>
本帖最后由 樱林花主 于 2015-10-6 12:48 编辑
<p>谢谢</p>
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