[原创]七绝---秋荷

心语飞香

<p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; COLOR: #999999; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font size="6"><font face="楷体_GB2312"><strong><font color="#ff0000">秋荷<span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></font></strong></font></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; COLOR: #999999; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 18.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#ff0000" size="5"><strong>白藕红莲飞翠鸟，</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; COLOR: #999999; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 18.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#ff0000" size="5"><strong>秋波绿叶隐青蛙。</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; COLOR: #999999; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 18.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#ff0000" size="5"><strong>苍蓬孕籽托香魄，</strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="center" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: center;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; COLOR: #999999; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 18.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;;"><font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#ff0000" size="5"><strong>俏立风中舞浪花。</strong></font></span></p>

梅庐

<p>句还好，“飞”“隐”字用的太虚了，斟酌下如何？</p><p>兄长诗转句多绵绵，很难出佳境，建议这方面注意。浅见</p>

无花酒

原帖由 梅庐 于 2006-11-19 21:06 发表
<p>句还好，“飞”“隐”字用的太虚了，斟酌下如何？</p><p>兄长诗转句多绵绵，很难出佳境，建议这方面注意。浅见</p>

有同感，所以我认为楼主应该是名女子