艾诗人
发表于 2006-12-13 13:45:34
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>景秀</i>在2006-12-12 12:08:55的发言：</b><br/><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">秦关日落寒沙急</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">汉水波轻晚照晖----两地相思,韵味十足.</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">荡荡池亭卿作婢</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">悠悠驿旅我为奴----一婢一奴,平等相待.</span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">足下诗成先寄我</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">关中路隘慢催伊----朋友间不论先或慢心里总是有数的．</span></span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">欣赏．</span></span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'mso-hansi-font-family:';">还有些句字不太顺，如＇应人归<span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> ＇</font></span></span></span></span></span></p></div><p></p><p> 多谢景兄细心指点,感动.将一修改一下,看看可否:</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">朔风吹雁送秋时</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">搜尽白云露湿衣</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">乍念廊前丹桂尽</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">忽传域外雪花飞</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">秦关日落寒沙急</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">汉水波轻晚照晖</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">凤沼龙池谙旧曲</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><span style="mso-spacerun: yes;"><font face="Times New Roman"> </font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman";">琴心夜夜扫屏帏</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: #666699;"><p></p></span></p><p></p>
艾诗人
发表于 2006-12-13 13:46:32
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>弗庵</i>在2006-12-12 15:19:12的发言：</b><br/>尤其喜第二首.可推.</div><p></p> 谢谢支持,多多指点.问好!
艾诗人
发表于 2006-12-13 13:47:11
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>梦落疏篱</i>在2006-12-12 22:15:14的发言：</b><br/>精.</div><p></p> 梦兄鼓励了.问好!
艾诗人
发表于 2006-12-13 13:48:37
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>山下诗人</i>在2006-12-13 10:42:56的发言：</b><br/><p>佳作欣赏</p></div><p></p> 多谢支持,很喜欢你的诗评,总有独到之处.多斧正.问好!
艾诗人
发表于 2006-12-13 13:50:27
<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>擺渡</i>在2006-12-13 12:59:25的发言：</b><br/>尤其喜第二首---同感！</div><p></p> 谢谢,这首写山村故事,那时真的是直肠子哦,问好!