[原创]五律 感事
本帖最后由 樱林花主 于 2015-10-6 14:04 编辑<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">冬初识嫩寒，<p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">晓起倚阑干。<p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">万里澄怀远，<p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">千年味道难。<p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">江山人共老，<p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">岁月梦随残。<p></p></span></b></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">梳掠菀枯事，<p></p></span></b></p><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: "Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA;"> 何如参圣坛。</span></b>
极欣赏颔联。起句“初冬”似更爽。第三联句式少变化，读来少韵味。好久不见兄长大作，问好了 本帖最后由 樱林花主 于 2015-10-6 14:04 编辑
<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;">万里澄怀远， <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;">千年味道难。 <p>此联学习了！</p></span></b></p><p>此联学习了！</p>
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<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>梅庐</i>在2006-11-16 11:12:38的发言：</b><br/>极欣赏颔联。起句“初冬”似更爽。第三联句式少变化，读来少韵味。好久不见兄长大作，问好了</div><p>谢梅社点评,问好!故意将初放后面以和识连结,即有初识意又指初冬,不知可否.</p>
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<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>蓝天孤鹤</i>在2006-11-16 14:37:32的发言：</b><br/><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">万里澄怀远， <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">千年味道难。 <p>此联学习了！</p></span></b></p><p>此联学习了！</p><p></p><p>此联学习了！</p></div><p></p>
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何如守钓滩作结如何
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<p>谢试改如下</p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;"><font color="#828877"><strong>五律 感事<br/></strong></font></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">冬初识嫩寒， <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">晓起倚阑干。 <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">万里澄怀远， <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">千年味道难。 <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">江山人共老， <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">岁月梦随残。 <p></p></span></b></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 11pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: olive; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-hansi-font-family: 'mso-bidi-font-family:宋体;mso-font-kerning:0pt;mso-ansi-language:zh-cn;;;">梳掠菀枯事，</span></b></p><p> <font color="#8a916f" size="3"><strong>何如守钓滩.</strong></font></p><p></p><p>呵呵,学学严子陵钓鱼去.</p>
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考慮的細緻入微 問好了 ^_^
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