梅心竹韵 发表于 2006-11-10 08:57:26

[原创]忆秦娥·秋末下太行（不知能否算作业？）

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<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">忆秦娥·秋末下太行<span lang="EN-US">2006.11.3</span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">晴空碧，</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">林梢燕侣双双昵。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">双双昵，</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">画屏更迭，</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">抹浓秋迹。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span lang="EN-US"><p></p></span></span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">山衔五色重重易，</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">车行百转程程疾。</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">程程疾，</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">淡烟凝翠，</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-font-family: &quot;Times New Roman&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">旅思清逸。</span></p>

晋风 发表于 2006-11-10 09:15:36

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<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">画屏更迭，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;">抹浓秋迹。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;;">淡烟凝翠，</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;;">旅思清逸。</span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;;"></span></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体;"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;;">好意境！学习！</span></span></p>

弗庵 发表于 2006-11-10 11:52:49

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结句还是可酌的.

潇湘渔歌 发表于 2006-11-10 14:50:14

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附议弗庵兄意见，结句少点力量。我觉得是可以放到作业里面去的。

无意狐人 发表于 2006-11-10 17:26:50

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<p>俺来学习姐姐的清丽靓词！一路风光哦！</p><p></p><p></p><p></p>

梅庐 发表于 2006-11-10 17:46:41

这叠字用的真险，欣赏了。梅心，好久不见了，问候

梅若雪 发表于 2006-11-10 18:02:08

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<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa;">淡烟凝翠，</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa;">旅思清逸</span></p><p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 'mso-font-kerning:1.0pt;; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa;">西西 喜欢偷走~~~~~~~~</span></p>

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