借酒一杯 发表于 2006-1-21 01:06:25

<P>多出自唐调,李,杜尤多.中联多用杜法.结句李,杜相杂,握手.</P>
<P>绝句间有佳篇不减唐人高处,五绝尤好.</P>
<P align=center>买痴因未果，天色待来人。<br>过往春秋客，花香不一身。</P>
<P align=center>此篇不愧总起,确实好.</P>
<P align=center>7律多有气力不逮之处,有雕工太过的感觉,尤以中二联明显,结句也不及绝句有味</P>
<P align=center>呵呵,随便开口胡说了,梅兄别怪</P>

梅庐 发表于 2006-1-21 22:11:53

借酒兄所说极当,十分感激

梦落疏篱 发表于 2006-1-21 23:39:01

这么多，收下慢品：）

诗院 发表于 2006-1-22 20:47:58

大作慢赏、学习!

客人 发表于 2006-1-22 23:45:58

<P>长绝</P>

歌乐人生 发表于 2006-1-23 11:50:52

眼花啊

梅庐 发表于 2006-1-23 13:25:56

歌乐老兄，好久不见啊！

张卫国 发表于 2006-1-23 16:50:31

这一年对梅君来说不易，于诗中可见一斑。

梅庐 发表于 2006-1-23 17:05:00

别人看诗，张兄看我。感动中……

歌乐人生 发表于 2006-1-24 10:25:34

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<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>买痴因未果，天色待来人。<BR>过往春秋客，花香不一身。 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>甲申年腊月初五子时 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>附： 忆与梅庐遇雪以寄赠其女友崔君生日 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>天寒生白雪，漫口与君谈。<BR>安知三两句，无因到岭南。 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 12pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>久未见陕西安康瘦清风君，知江南有雪，赋此赠之<o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>漂泊追晚霞，细致计生涯。 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>怜惜无音讯，故人知落花。 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>甲申年腊月十六 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>赠江南可采莲 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; WORD-BREAK: break-all; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: center; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt" align=center>中原人楚楚，潇洒赴红尘。<BR>尽揽风骚意，江南北国春 <o:p></o:p></P>
<P medium none; PADDING-RIGHT: 0cm; BORDER-TOP: medium none; PADDING-LEFT: 0cm; TEXT-JUSTIFY: inter-ideograph; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 142.5pt; BORDER-LEFT: medium none; TEXT-INDENT: 18pt; PADDING-TOP: 0cm; BORDER-BOTTOM: medium none; TEXT-ALIGN: justify; mso-border-alt: solid #6595D6 .75pt; mso-padding-alt: 0cm 0cm 0cm 8.0pt">互相寄赠之句，不一而论。或细致，或粗放，或低沉，或直白，或不知所云而无所云，盖非局中人，非性情中，或彼此有不解，或彼此深谙，或可及人而不及他人，或兼之。兼风骨，兼形意，难矣。曰：不可论。 五绝多好句，熟句熟路，哑字稍见。其他未看，想五律应该还好。七言或许差一些。去此久矣，盖有不当之论，忍了吧。</P></DIV>
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